Can you understand why Esther killed Laurence? Can you accept that she did so?
Relationship is a sensitive topic. Different individuals go through such different experiences in relationships that it is almost impossible for someone else to judge or even make a comment about one's relationship. So I'm careful to write about my thoughts.
Well, if you ask me about the action that Esther made in the end, I would say that it was a devastating ending. I felt dark and gloomy with mixed emotions after reading the story. I believe that the disappointment and devastation she felt caused her to act in such violence before she could even help herself.
My answer to the first question is yes, I understand why Esther made such decision, but I do not and did not want to accept the fact that she did. No matter how frustrating the situation must have been for Esther, I still believe she could have controlled herself by making another choice, instead of choosing to murder him. Especially since she was a converted Christian, I think she should have maybe, spoken to God first.
It is difficult to imagine her feelings and emotions at that very moment. But one thing that clarifies the illegal action that she made, is that Esther was deeply and madly in love with Laurence.
The murder she made was out of jealously. If she could not have Laurence, there was no way she would allow the factor's daughter to be by his side. Jealously is an extremely scary feeling. Not just that, but the feeling of being betrayed by the one whom you love so much, and by the venerable person whom you respected more than anything is simply unimaginable.
The anger stroked upon me and I tried to imagine the situation in Esther's shoes. It was extremely frustrating having to read Laurence being persuaded by Father Paul so easily. If Laurence stood up for his own thought, Esther would not have murdered him. If father Paul had not mentioned about the factor's daughter, the disappointment and pain would still exist, but she would not have killed him.
If Laurence truly loved Esther, he should have stood by his own thought no matter what negative comments Father Paul gave Laurence. Being a good nephew is one thing, but seeing Laurence giving up rather easily showed weakness and what a coward he was.
The conversation between the two men basically took away Esther's hope and dream to become a wonderful woman that she could have had become. Like Esther mentioned on the last two sentences, they judged her redskin, her background, and even her parents. Forgetting the most important part that she is a woman.
In conclusion, I understand her point of view, but it is upsetting that she let the evil overcome the goodness of her.
Hello, I'm Sungtae Kim. Thank you for sharing this essay. I enjoyed it becaus it gave a lot of points to think about. Some points that you mentioned in the writing such as the problems jealousy could cause. A little mistake here. I think you should take off the 'l' in 'jealously'. Back to the point, i also liked the pharases used in the writing, such as 'imagine the situation in Esther's shoes'. It is hard to use phrase like that in the speech or writings but I think you did a good job. Also about the organizations, I think the order was great. But just t\o make few suggestions, I think it would be great to explain more about your answer to first question when you mentioned it and then go on to the newt question. When I read I felt that there are too many paragraphs, so I think it would be great to sum up some paragraphs. For example the first two paragraphs are basically talking about similar contents, so you are introducing your topic. I think it's better to combine them into one. Reading down to the last part of the essay, I think you answered to question 2. I liked this part of the essay because I wasn't able to answer the question, but your answer made me understand the last two sentences of the text. Overall your essay was really great. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your response! I will keep your comment in mind. I agree that my paragraphs are long. I want to make it more clear and precise. This is definitely something that I need to work on more.
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Hello I'm U Yong Chung. I really enjoyed your writing. Your sentences were concise so it was easy to read. I felt that you sympathized the characters of story, so the writing was very touching. What I want to say is that it was fine writing. However I felt something lacking about the structure of writing because there are too many paragraphs. If you make your paragraphs small then it will be better to arrange your idea about the topic. The content of writing was really great!
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