The basic job of students is studying, but some students don't like this job. I'm one of those students who hate studying. It was irritating to continuously work to improve exam scores throughout high school life. Considering the future, I had to work harder but it was easier said than done. Some people feel in the similar way with their job. They don't want to work sometimes, when the situation compels them to work for living. This might make them look at negative sides of their job and end up making vicious cycle by worsening the feeling even more. I guess this is why some people who work in totally different jobs say in similar negative nuance about what they do. To crack this vicious cycle, people need to think about the purpose of working. This might help them try to find positive things as they work. Work have purposes which can be summed up into three words; nature, achievement, and identity.
Working is the nature of humanity. It is one of desires that human has. if not satisfied, this desire can cause bitter consequences. The victims of unemployment can suffer from poverty and solidarity. But the biggest problem that makes a failure of their life is emotional problems such as lasting depressions and loneliness. These feelings can cause harsh decisions like suicide which is becoming a common thing nowadays. This desire doesn't end even when people are old. My grandfather worked in a company as an engineer until age of 70s. He enjoyed working and said that his friends envy him of working until that age. His friends tell him that he is the happiest person among them. Working is a nature of human which can be bailed by other hardships in life but eventually will turn out in later life.
Work is a mean that leads to achievements. When we ask elementary students about their dream, they pick up names of jobs that sound good for them. These dreams are specified or modified along their lifestyle and taste. Working helps them achieve these dreams and get what they want. Children always find new things in their life and learn. This is not different for the grown-ups who get new experiences through working which sometimes can be a failure, but eventually achieve what they dreamed for. Without working, people will never achieve anything and will lose the chance to taste the thrill of achievements.
Finally, people find their identity through jobs. Identity means the true inside of a person that includes thoughts, characteristics, and past experiences even. The work that we are doing shows those identities and help oneself recognize it. Identity is like a puzzle that is matched through hints that come from each piece. Every job that we do in our life can influence our job and transform it according to new experiences.
In conclusion, the purpose of working can be separated into three parts. It is the nature of human. It is a mean that leads us to achievements. And finally, It helps people find their identities.
Hi, I'm seonghwan in the same class. First, I especially liked you suggested the need for discussion in first paragraph. It proceeded naturally from your own idea through general statement to the thesis statement. One thing that might improve your writing is about the conclusion paragraph. you already well suggested the thesis statement once more and the summary of your writiing. But, why don't you add your own impression you feel while writing. Or it would also be good to add any meaningful or implicative statements to end the writing more smoothly.
ReplyDeleteHello, my name is U Yong Chung and one of your classmate. I really enjoyed reading your essay.I think your first paragraph has enough idea to discuss about your topic. However, I thibk yiu should have more details about your idea. For example, someone might have no idea about elementary student's dream. If you support your idea with morr specific details then it will be more great. Thank you.
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